When I do workshops on revision, I often share an example from a draft and a revision to illustrate how I work. At the request of teachers, I have created pdf pages that you can download and print (or project onto your classroom screen) to share with students.
Example of Editing and Revising The Naked Mole-Rat Letters
Example of Revising from Invisible Lines
Example of Editing and Revising Snarf Attack, Underfoodle, and the Secret of Life
Example of Editing and Revising Edgar Allan’s Official Crime Investigation Notebook
Thank you! I am an English teacher, and to show my students a writer in progress is priceless. This is a great example of revision! Thank you again for sharing your process and for the work you do.
These are such fabulous examples of revision. Thank you so much for providing them! My 4th grade students will love learning about revision using examples from an author.
I’m glad you’re finding them useful. Please pass on the link to your colleagues!